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She's hurting,
She's breaking,
She's crying inside.
She's yelling,
She's screaming,
And hiding her eyes.
Yeah you wont, 
hear a thing,
It's a-ll inside.
The hurting,
the screaming,
Her smile's a lie.
She stares out,
The window,
And wishes to die.
Or maybe,
When she'll jump,
She'll finally fly.

You cannot,
See her face,
She's hiding it all,
So you wont,
Yeah you wont,
See her fall...

Calm on the Oustside, written by Emma Thrussell, 27/11/12
This poem talks about the internal screaming many people suffering from depression, and other illnesses, go through most every day. While they seem at peace and perfectly calm on the outside, there is the pain, suffering, and noise inside the person's head. However, not all people have the internal noise, many people have complete silence. This is a second form of depression, and not one I know much about. I suffer from 'angry depression' which is what the poem follows, and I often find myself cursing, in my mind, to not only fellow students, but also teachers and friends and other innocent people that did nothing to anger me except exist.

I wrote this poem in Home Economics today, looking out the window and wishing my teacher would let us do something productive. I'm not having a very good week so far. Might just be the holiday mode starting up early. Who knows.

Critiques are welcome, and a nice little comment telling me you've read it would be much appreciated. ^_^
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CrazyFawfulfan14 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah you wont,
See her fall...


I find that last line haunting... Very nice job.
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks ^_^
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Flower7052 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013
story of my life. Lovely poem though - one of the best I've read!
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
aww thanks. that means a lot to me :D
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ToughSunshine32 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist
Hang in there. I've been having some troubles with depression also but I'm doing better.
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thats awesome to here! Keep it up ^_^
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ToughSunshine32 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist
I will thanks! You too!
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blue-eyed-bee Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
i really like this poem. it's one of the best i've read on this site. although, that's just me :)
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
awwwwwwwwww Thanks!
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blue-eyed-bee Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012
:)
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Fabity-Fab Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
Hmmmm..... For some reason when i was reading this i thought of the girl from Evanescense singing it.... But i like it.
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Haha it does sound like something Amy would sing, doesn't it?
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Fabity-Fab Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
:D
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ibugsyou Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
nice. I like how it flows together and clearly projects how a lot people feel. I'm sure everyone feels like this on a rainy day haha
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you so much for your comment. I feel all warm and fuzzy inside ^_^
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Sutsuki-Sensei Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
This is very well written Em. And some people, especially those hurting, will find it very easy to relate to. Excellent, excellent job!
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Awww thanks Suki. I'm really glad you like it. :)
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nikutsuki Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
I really like this poem <3
It's sad to hear about your bad week though; hope next weeks will be better! ^^
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It should be, as tomorrow is my last day of school. ^_^
Thank you so much, your comment means so much! :huggle:
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nikutsuki Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Oh, that's good, indeed! C:
You're most welcome, I'm glad you appreciate the comment <3
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Mochi-D Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I can relate to this. It's kind of like a volcano that is corked, willingly. It's so frustrating at times when you want to tell someone how you`re really feeling, but you also have the fear of them looking at you differently and/or rejecting you. People who are not depressed, or more accurately, never been depressed or suffered from depression cannot and will not be able to relate until they're in that black sinkhole themselves.

I enjoyed reading this one. : )
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yay! You get what I'm talking about! :D
Yes, its is a lot like a plugged volcano. I can often see myself jumping up in class and screaming at everyone, but I don't, because I'll be judged, and people will assume its much worse for me than it really is.

Thank you so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :)
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Mochi-D Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Haha! You're welcome!
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D
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KirstinLove Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This so says how I feel right now...
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm sorry to hear you're feeling like that. I hope tomorrow brings better joy :)
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KirstinLove Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Yeah... Thank you :) Let's hope for that indeed :)
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BelleMaske Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm sorry you're having a rough time. I've had a lot of days like that. Just once, it'd be nice if people could see what we're really thinking and feeling inside.
This is a beautiful piece. It's so heartfelt, and I love the rhythm of it. Well done. :hug:
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you so much. Your comment makes me feel all warm inside. ^_^
I'm sorry to hear you're having rough days, they can really pull you down. Hope tomorrow is a much better day for you :)
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BelleMaske Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, you too. :)
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rstoker2017 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student General Artist
you may want to read this. Copy and paste the link in the website bar. ;)


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its supposed to help, ;)
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm not looking for help right now, only an outlet, but thank you anyway. I'll be sure to give it a read ^_^
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rstoker2017 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student General Artist
thanks. =) & np. ;)
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PreciousCosmos Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This poem is really sad and accurate, and thank you for what you said in the author's comments (because now I know that I'm feeling second form and that it is something actually wrong and not just me thinking something is).
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
There is nothing wrong with you if you have depression, hun. Its an ordinary illness, just like catching a cold or the flu. Sometimes taking the right vitamin tablet is all it takes to get better. I'd talk to you GP or doctor and ask him or her to assess you, before you go diagnosing yourself. (If they offer you anti-depressants, turn them down until you have all the background info like reactions and side effect and how long you're able to use them for. Trust me.)
Thank you for your kind words, they mean a lot to me :)
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PreciousCosmos Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No, no, none of that's necessary :blushes:. Thank you, though. I'll let people who really need to know that. And you're very welcome :meow:.
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ChocolateBlizzard Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
Great poem. I really know what you are talking about. Don't worry sweetheart, everything will be alright :cuddle:
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I know, Thank you. :)
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Luunappi Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Wow, very beautiful but sad poem :clap:
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*blush* Naww thanks :D
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
They are very nice, but not really want I was looking for.
Sorry.
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emoowllying607 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Good job :) It was neat.
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww thanks! :heart:
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emoowllying607 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
no problem ^-^
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whodyathink Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey, can I please feature this in :iconasexuals-ftw:?
Thank you for this piece of work, it's excellent!
-SK
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That would be amazing. It doesn't have anything to do with asexuals, but if you feel it would suit the group, I'm more than happy to let you share it.
Thank you for the opportunity.
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Lady-Lisette Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student Writer
Beautiful poem!
I pray things turn out better for you :heart:
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FlyAway-555 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks. I'm much better than I use to be. :)
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RazberryRath Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
Amazingly writen!
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